new girl

chapter 1new girl in town

Hi my name is Ashly and I just moved from the country side her to the city. As she talks to one of the schools giddence Attendents. Here you go sweetie this is your classes for the year and letting you now our cafeteria has great food so don't be afraid to get some. I look at my schedule and see I have 1st period gym what a great way to start the day get some exercise in. I walk in and see that this schools gym periods are co ad and start asking some of the others girls what were we're going to been doing. Then out teacher comes in and starts to tell us to go into the locker room and get changed. I start to panic as I walk in knowing I don't have and other clothes to change into. One of the other girl takes me over and gives me a shirt with the ability to see the stomach and tells"don't worry as long you look hot Mr. Grids will give you and A". After finding out about this I relax knowing I'm 5,6 and 104 with right abbs and butt. I walk out of the locker room and see him he was atleast 6,1 and maybe 155 and was with a bunch of other guys with football jerseys on of the school. He looks over to me and I hide my face as not to blush. To my advale it did not work and he starts walking over I'm my direction. He comes up to me and asks if I'm new and for my name. I'm Ashly and yes I'm new. Nice to meet you as he is looking at me I'm Kevin but the guys call me Kev. Nice to meet you Kevin and I get inturupted to start streaching. After the period comes to an end I look to see what I have next and I have lunch but i see I have 2nd and 7th periods of lunch which I thought to my self is werid. The girl who lent my the shirt said I can keep it and that it may just help me out. As I walk to the cafeteria which was next to gym I see Kevin again and he asks what I had next which I replayed lunch. He then asked me if I would want to eat with him saying we had the same lunch period and that none of his friends had 2nd lunch. I replayed Yes almost to exsited as we find a table together. He insist for him to get my food for me and as he walks to get the good which smelt great I get a glimpse of his abbs when his jersey gets stuck to the table. This made me sreek a little inside as I see how hot he is . He came back with a large bowl of pasta and bread with a big slice of chocolate cake. I look at the food and tell him I don't think I can eat it all and he replayes"if you don't you will hurt us all saying all food takeing and wasted is wayed and factors into your lunch grade which I did not know about. So becoase of this I start to eat the food he gave me and he eats his and we fire back and forth questions I felt the food go down to my stomach and it was great it was so tasty and the bread was so soft and warm. I quickaly find out he is in 11th grade and is the starting varsity QB at the school. Finding this out only been in 9th grade shoked me. He then reminds me about my cake and even after been stuffed full and feeling pain in my stomach I eat the cake. I surprised even my self and him after finishing it the period ends and he gives me his number I was so exsighted the rest of the day flue by so quick. When I got home I told my mom about this and she gesters to my tummy seen that is was stretched out and been a thin person her self from working out scolded me for this. I told her that it is part of the school corse and that I got given a lot to eat. I qiickaly start to text Kevin and then realize that he is probably at practice and decide to weight to call him. I leave him a message to text me when he got the chance and I go to the bathroom to go take a relaxing bathtub soke. It was only then that I realized how bloated I look but just played it off.


Writers note: this is my first story so expect same errors and feed back is welcomed
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goodworks 3 months
Let me just throw out an example : "Start to ft him when my mom when to out neighbors house and we start to talk and I tell him the what has happen."

I have... A general idea of what this means. I think. I'm not sure that was your intention.
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goodworks 3 months
... Not that much harder. Sorry, I was cut off. You have a good foundation but if you tried to show that you care, you story would go from F to B at least.
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goodworks 3 months
Paragraphs? Commas? Quotation marks? Even the most basic of spell checks? You gotta understand that it literally makes it needlessly hard to understand what is going on without that things, right? Do you want to write popular stories? It's not that much
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Good, but definitely proofread.
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xavier311 3 months
The plot isn't bad but you need to work on your spelling and grammar.
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LevelUP 3 months
Really cool for a first story smiley
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chrisart 3 months
Hi,
The only thing i would like to see different here is for your story to have paragraphs. its realllly hard to read like it is.

But please keep going