Empathy gain

chapter 27

[Finale]

She is driving home, now.

Billboards line the city expressway, flashing eye-grabbing colours like dramaqueens flying past her peripheral vision at 100 kilometers per hour, each board screaming (so to speak) in contradiction with its neighbours - be thin, eat bad food, be thin, eat bad food, be thin - oscillating back and forth to bully the subliminal zones of drivers' minds into a cowering corner, submitting to both voices at the same time. But here is Melissa, not so easily beaten. Among the warzone of intentional typeface and elegant designs, her spirit ascends to the challenge in one direction only, defying the other; at the next shopping center, she pulls into the parking lot, very ready to have an afternoon snack far too large to be considered advisable.

From hills and horizon to emptying park, the day dims on us with the sun sinking red down the sky to soon vanish and let the moon give us light. Melissa shuts the door of her car, locks it on us, and we are left here, watching, as a set of bodily curves strides away with more assurance than we found her with. Ghostly sprites of potential words, stories and universes dance around her, unseen to the eye until she will give them form. With parting doors, the shopping center has taken her away from us, for now.

We rise to see the city entire, here among rapidly cooling clouds, nine square kilometers of city central skyscrapers and three thousand more of low suburbs bleeding out like stars spilled across the land as city planners activate the lights which will make clear the roads for countless souls who do not yet feel sonder, the epiphany put on hold until jobs have been done, paychecks have arrived, cars have been driven home, children have been fed, bills have been paid, sleep has been had, and then for most, put on hold only for the rest of their lives...But here we foresee the great Atlantic presence, understanding that it has already extended one of its many United octopus limbs invisibly and silently, seeping into both government and corporate zones, presently having wrapped itself around the near-future of three million Australian citizens, all sinking into rapid eye movement, dreams influenced however obviously or subtly by the societal order to be slender. But perhaps it is already too late. One of an infinite different variations of the possible future is headed this way. A big one.

Somewhere, in a fictional universe linked to ours by the love of readers and dreamers, Charlene is ascended to heaven.
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Comments

Letters And ... 1 year
What a great conceit for a story! Terrific writing
FatAdvocateFA 1 year
Thank you smiley
Karenjenk 4 years
I think i read this befor and dont know why i dindt leave feed back... i love this.. i wish it could go on and on. i like how you didnt rely too much on number for size and weight reference
FatAdvocateFA 4 years
Thanks for the comment Aquarius64

Didn't notice that. Honestly i'm surprised this story is still being read.
Aquarius64 4 years
VERY well written!
However, I have a few points to make:
1. Somewhere around ch 5 you have several references to the time of day. Unfortunately, you may have got am and pm mixed up as you have Melissa sleeping in and heading off to uni at ten o’clock
FatAdvocateFA 7 years
It'll be the last chapter. I'm finally letting this horse die in peace.
Jazzman 7 years
Chapter 21 is amazing.
Supercode 7 years
Great story so far! I hope Melissa eventually realizes she likes being fat and stops fighting the battle of the bulge, though.
Curiousv 7 years
.. and hating getting fat, converts faster than St. Paul, and becomes a never-doubting, never-fearing mindless eating machine.
Curiousv 7 years
I'm trying to do the same with my story, but yours captures the feelings and internal struggles of the protagonist much better. And I also value that she has a character arc, because almost every other girl in wg fiction who starts off thin and hating get
FatAdvocateFA 7 years
Interesting reaction, jcantrell25263. I wanted to write something more psychological, but I was worried how it would go down. Would it be too touchy? Very glad to know there's someone who likes it.
FatAdvocateFA 7 years
Aww hey, thanks curiousv. That comment means a lot to me smiley
Curiousv 7 years
A welcoming refreshment of a story, with a unique style, one of the few stories here which can really be called literature.
SpecterFA 7 years
This is amazing so far! Thank you :]