Story authors

Created new story in form of text adventure. Not sure if I can get away with posting it in the stories section

textadventures.co.uk/games/view/kqfjohnz6uakyz_6ayeezw/a-day-of-gluttony

Are you still working on it?
If yes, it could need some more choices, more branching. It's no use of being a "choose your own adventure" if there is nothing to choose, it should then be a normal story instead.

What I'm talking about, is that there are too many cases where the "choice" is simply:

A.) nothing happens
B.) you can't do that
C.) proceed to the next chapter

If you added longer branches, it could be developed into a great story!

I didn't want to get too complex for just a bit of a laugh... if I do a few more chapters or get some good ideas I might copy the transcript to Unity to mess around with more variables

Zork