Looking for criticism

Joined 10 months

I'm working on a story and would like some constructive criticism, anyone interested in taking a look at what I've got so far?

3 weeks

Paco

Joined 1 year

I’d like to have a look of the story

2 weeks

Joined 5 years

Glomp:
I'm working on a story and would like some constructive criticism, anyone interested in taking a look at what I've got so far?

sure!

2 weeks

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