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Weight gain mystery story

I'm wanting to make a weight gain mystery story but I keep having issues figuring out how it could be done.

I guess mainly because I've never really seen one, so I guess part of my question is if anyone has a recommendation.

If not/but also, I want to know how to really pull this off. How would the mystery be driven forward by the weight gain? How could the mystery drive the weight gain forward?

Luckily for my idea we have a few things working in our favor, I'm wanting to make something that is very off the wall and bizarre. My biggest inspiration for this is MTV's Liquid Television which often featured a few mystery or secret agent segments (Invisible Hands, Psycho Gram, Brad Dharma, etc.), though of course each of them are anything but normal.

So it doesn't have to make sense, it just has to get the story moving. Though often these also focus on the supernatural (psychic powers mostly, though sometimes they use things like ridiculous super powers or odd secret agent preparations).

I also have one thing that might be used as the mystery, the idea for the opening is that our lead suddenly gets an appetite out of nowhere and this is what causes them to start eating like mad and gaining weight.

They could be trying to figure out what happened to cause this. This also creates the conflict of them wanting to solve the mystery but gaining weight is setting them back somehow or at least becoming an obstacle as they want to focus on it more.

I feel as though the mystery and weight gain would just kind of be there in the story and not really interact with one another though or that they'd mess each other up in some way.

Most sources to help with making a mystery story are about murder mysteries and a dead body doesn't sound like my idea of a good time. Also, how could I keep the reader focused on the mystery and focused on the turn-ons at the same time, and even if balanced so they focus on them scene by scene how would we transition from one to the other and still flow that well (so how do they both drive each other forward)?

Some questions I know I'll have to answer myself like the solution to the mystery, how the supernatural elements are included or used, and also how this works as a game (which is my ultimate goal for this project, inspired by the 3DO/PS1 game Psychic Detective which fits in with Liquid Television easily), but still any help with how I could there is greatly appreciated.

tl;dr: Any recommendations for a fat fetish mystery story for inspiration? If not, how can a fat fetish mystery story work so that both of those elements are driving each other forward? The solution to that question doesn't have to make perfect sense as this story will delve into the bizarre and supernatural or just absurd anyway.

Any help is appreciated, thanks in advance.
3 years

Weight gain mystery story

I just wrote one lol
3 years

Weight gain mystery story

Having now read through your story I have to say you did a good job on pacing and flow, and honestly it is a good story overall.

That said, some of the issues I mentioned in my post actually showed up in your story just as a I feared they would in a mystery story with a fetish angle.

Firstly, while the fetish stuff drives the story forward it seems to take a backseat to it. Due to the mystery parts I find it difficult to be turned on by it, I'll go into more detail in a second.

The fetish elements also seem to be somewhat shoved in when possible, some discussions the characters have goes suddenly from being typical mystery "give me info" questions and then straight into "nice tits" porn conversation like a switch is flipped but as I asked I'm not sure how you'd do it differently.

Then of course there's the heavy subject material in the story that also makes it very difficult to be turned on by but makes it easier to take seriously as a mystery.

Though even there it feels kind of weird or uncomfortable since it's being wrapped in a fetish story, it somewhat feels like it's also meant to be part of the turn on.

That is something I've been trying to avoid in my own story but it seems people keep telling me to actually come out and talk about it in my story instead.

I don't know any other way to get around it and I'll try to get off this subject as quickly as possible, I felt for Raven in a very personal way as I too have been raped. I admittedly felt a sense of catharsis when you had everyone involved in her assault killed off but also a sense of guilt.

Having something similar to my own trauma brought up in a sex story honestly felt very uncomfortable but when looking at it as a mystery alone I felt at least a little better about it and thus that's why I feel that you can't mix the two together like I'm going for.

So we're kind of where we were, I guessed it would blend together about as well as bread and motor oil and it seems I was right.

Sorry, though thank you for the good read. Maybe I'll figure out how to do this eventually without waking up my inner demons.

Sorry if I made anyone uncomfortable, and I hope I didn't break any rules. I'll remove that part of the post if I need to, sorry.
3 years

Weight gain mystery story

I've intertwined some mystery elements into some of my stories in the past. Though they've all relied on heavily super-natural premises to allow the mystery to exist without touching on more serious subject matter.

I think the easiest solution to your primary issue mentioned above, is ensuring that the fetish content is A) a part of the mystery narrative and B ) that there is enough a narrative to the fetish content that it can be easily married with the more traditional mystery elements. I haven't always been perfect about it myself though, and it can be tricky.
3 years

Weight gain mystery story

Honestly this does feel like the answer. I suggested to have the mystery be about what caused the lead's sudden ravenous hunger and also to have answers somehow come from the eating for the gains themselves.

So, thank you. This is the answer I was looking for.

Though I do wonder, how exactly does a super-natural premise lead to avoiding serious subject matter?

I've seen plenty of fantasy stories that do focus on heavy subjects or just take a dark turn:

-Final Fantasy 7 contains scenes of mind control and of course there's the Don Corneo sidequest that goes an uncomfortable direction before too long
-above I mentioned Psychic Detective which has scenes of mentally disabled people and murder alongside showcasing the dark side of the psychic powers within the universe

Those are just two examples but there are others I just can't think of right now. In either case, my question is how exactly did you use supernatural premises to avoid dark subject matter?

I'm interested in knowing how I can do the same because I've been trying to keep my plots from going that direction for so long but most of the stories I can find seem to go that direction even when I thought it couldn't.

Thank you again, looking forward to your answer.

EDIT: By the way, I love the cover art you use for your stories.
3 years

Weight gain mystery story

lydsville:

Though I do wonder, how exactly does a super-natural premise lead to avoiding serious subject matter?

EDIT: By the way, I love the cover art you use for your stories.


You'd have to read her stories I feel to get a full awnser, one of her stories for example, called L.B.L Up... (I'll give a link to it here: fantasyfeeder.com/stories/view would def recommend, but just a heads up it's a long one but you get to know and grow fond of the characters as they gain weight ☺)

...delves into a trope, one I feel is truely underappreciated in the FA community, I like to call reality/perception warping weight gain, which makes it so only some people are aware of others gaining but at first they don't know who is causing it, but the person also has the power to make others gain weight, it sounds confusing I know but if you take the time to read the story the mystery elements start to appear after awhile.

Also I completely agree that her cover art is fantastic, the characters look so plush and lovely! I love to spend my free time drawing them much bigger. 🥰
3 years

Weight gain mystery story

I might check that one out when I get a chance though I'm also thinking maybe the answer is also to not let my ill mental health make decisions for me like it tries to.

That's where I feel my dark ideas come from, though I might be wrong and maybe I'll get a chance to read that and see what I need for my story.

It's basically that I'm trying to recreate a feeling I get from something else but I'm not sure exactly where that feeling comes from and my brain suggests an idea that works but gives me a different and/or negative feeling in a different context.

The reality warping idea was one I thought of using in my story in some way. I thought about how I could have the character hide their weight gain and had an idea of a magic coat that tucked their fat in and made them appear skinny, though eventually I realized this made the plot twist of how they hadn't gained weight in the first place somewhat obvious or just didn't make sense in the first place.

That said, I want an idea that doesn't entirely make sense in my story but more like something from dream logic.

A few things I've written down that the story needs in my notes is that it needs a bizarre premise treated as ordinary, tasks accomplished through strange means, and something fascinating treated as mundane.

All of these are qualities of a dream but also things taken from one of my inspirations, a 90s animation compilation show called Liquid Television that delved into the surreal quite often.

I know it's too obscure for most people to remember but there's one character who would be great for this fetish, Kittka from The Specialists segments of the show. She's an escape artist who is almost literally made of rubber (in one bit she points out how she has no bones, and one enemy's mental blasts bounce off of her).

She has blue skin and a French accent (I think the actress was just actually French, not sure though). Given her rubber like properties would already be quite soft now imagine a few more pounds on her frame.

Long story short, perhaps this idea wouldn't be that weird given the surreal things I normally watch.
3 years

Weight gain mystery story

Well the primary reason a super natural premise allowed me to avoid darker subject matter is that it allowed me to create investmemt from the readers without needing to dip into darker topics.

Mytery stories aren't inherently made good by things like murder. What makes a mystery story good is the feeling of information unfolding as you piece together the story. Loving that moment when previous occurences acquired context they never had before.

However in order to acheive that satisfacfion there needs to be periods of time where the reader doesn't have enough information to go off of. And most importantly they have to be invested enough to care about the answer. Which is why murders and simarly dark subject matters inevitably occur as hooks. Because their eye catching and people take an interest in them inherently.

A supernatural premise allowed me to avoid that by simply having a hook that would invest people that wasn't particularly dark or negative in nature.
Honestly fetish writing makes this easier than in regular fiction. Because you know what'll hook and invest your readers to begin with.
3 years

Weight gain mystery story

Exactly as I thought, my won mental health was the reason I wasn't. It would never allow me to see that the hook is the fantasy itself.

In my case though it was always the conflict I struggled with more than the hook, like it's a mystery so of course the conflict would have to come from something.

The antagonistic force is where I start to struggle because I start t lead into a dark direction. For a mystery though the antagonistic force can be as easy as just the obstacles in way of finding clues to solve the mystery.

Though we also need an ultimate solution to the mystery and again my brain goes into the direction of a person and that's where it takes a dark turn. Again I suppose maybe with fantasy it could just be explained as something that just happened.

Thank you, I think I now see a more clear solution.
3 years

Weight gain mystery story

lydsville:
Having now read through your story I have to say you did a good job on pacing and flow, and honestly it is a good story overall.

That said, some of the issues I mentioned in my post actually showed up in your story just as a I feared they would in a mystery story with a fetish angle.

Firstly, while the fetish stuff drives the story forward it seems to take a backseat to it. Due to the mystery parts I find it difficult to be turned on by it, I'll go into more detail in a second.

The fetish elements also seem to be somewhat shoved in when possible, some discussions the characters have goes suddenly from being typical mystery "give me info" questions and then straight into "nice tits" porn conversation like a switch is flipped but as I asked I'm not sure how you'd do it differently.

Then of course there's the heavy subject material in the story that also makes it very difficult to be turned on by but makes it easier to take seriously as a mystery.

Though even there it feels kind of weird or uncomfortable since it's being wrapped in a fetish story, it somewhat feels like it's also meant to be part of the turn on.

That is something I've been trying to avoid in my own story but it seems people keep telling me to actually come out and talk about it in my story instead.

I don't know any other way to get around it and I'll try to get off this subject as quickly as possible, I felt for Raven in a very personal way as I too have been raped. I admittedly felt a sense of catharsis when you had everyone involved in her assault killed off but also a sense of guilt.

Having something similar to my own trauma brought up in a sex story honestly felt very uncomfortable but when looking at it as a mystery alone I felt at least a little better about it and thus that's why I feel that you can't mix the two together like I'm going for.

So we're kind of where we were, I guessed it would blend together about as well as bread and motor oil and it seems I was right.

Sorry, though thank you for the good read. Maybe I'll figure out how to do this eventually without waking up my inner demons.

Sorry if I made anyone uncomfortable, and I hope I didn't break any rules. I'll remove that part of the post if I need to, sorry.


That was the best constructive criticism yet, thank you.

I did have a hard time weaving the fetish elements into thevstory because the story was the main focus. Maybe the fetish should have been instead.

I'll do better next time.
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