That guy is insane
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Baba Yaga:When I was 19 i took a girl to burger king and stuffed her silly. Her gut got so round and I couldnt keep my hands off her when I was driving her home. I knew I had the kink and thought "wpw, this is what its like?"
Even though things ended badly between us years later, that was my first time and it was awesome...for me anyway ;-)
Feeder-Eng:Nice. Guessing she was into it
No, she wasn't. She only did it to make her bf jealous because she was getting more attention from me than him at the time. It worked, they got married 5 years later.
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When I was 19 i took a girl to burger king and stuffed her silly. Her gut got so round and I couldnt keep my hands off her when I was driving her home. I knew I had the kink and thought "wpw, this is what its like?"
Even though things ended badly between us years later, that was my first time and it was awesome...for me anyway ;-)
3 years
lydsville:
Having now read through your story I have to say you did a good job on pacing and flow, and honestly it is a good story overall.
That said, some of the issues I mentioned in my post actually showed up in your story just as a I feared they would in a mystery story with a fetish angle.
Firstly, while the fetish stuff drives the story forward it seems to take a backseat to it. Due to the mystery parts I find it difficult to be turned on by it, I'll go into more detail in a second.
The fetish elements also seem to be somewhat shoved in when possible, some discussions the characters have goes suddenly from being typical mystery "give me info" questions and then straight into "nice tits" porn conversation like a switch is flipped but as I asked I'm not sure how you'd do it differently.
Then of course there's the heavy subject material in the story that also makes it very difficult to be turned on by but makes it easier to take seriously as a mystery.
Though even there it feels kind of weird or uncomfortable since it's being wrapped in a fetish story, it somewhat feels like it's also meant to be part of the turn on.
That is something I've been trying to avoid in my own story but it seems people keep telling me to actually come out and talk about it in my story instead.
I don't know any other way to get around it and I'll try to get off this subject as quickly as possible, I felt for Raven in a very personal way as I too have been raped. I admittedly felt a sense of catharsis when you had everyone involved in her assault killed off but also a sense of guilt.
Having something similar to my own trauma brought up in a sex story honestly felt very uncomfortable but when looking at it as a mystery alone I felt at least a little better about it and thus that's why I feel that you can't mix the two together like I'm going for.
So we're kind of where we were, I guessed it would blend together about as well as bread and motor oil and it seems I was right.
Sorry, though thank you for the good read. Maybe I'll figure out how to do this eventually without waking up my inner demons.
Sorry if I made anyone uncomfortable, and I hope I didn't break any rules. I'll remove that part of the post if I need to, sorry.
That was the best constructive criticism yet, thank you.
I did have a hard time weaving the fetish elements into thevstory because the story was the main focus. Maybe the fetish should have been instead.
I'll do better next time.
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I just wrote one lol
3 years
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Yeah I'm guilty of that. I recently re-mastered all but one of my stories just to fit the new theme I'm going for. I added banner pics and a host element to them.
I didnt know it would clog up the new stories feed to do that though. My bad
3 years
BiteSize:
I, uh, know it’s a niche of a niche, but... I would be super interested if you ever wanted to make something that was aimed at feedee bimbos 😅 It’s hard to find that kind of content
I kinda did something like that in my story Ms Brooks' Class but not the feedee part. Maybe I should write a sequel where the bimbo is a feedee too ;-)
3 years
LetMeEatCake:
I think I'm a six and going towards a seven at this point. Regular jeans are a no go for me. Just way to uncomfortable and awkward.
:-)
3 years
SushiQueen:
I was groomed and abused by a teacher and this is in no form grooming or abuse lol.
How do you get from point a to point b on what I said? Like imagine if this a different topic.
Me: I loved the movie Predator 2 as a child.
Him: "Your parents were evil aliens from Planet Plaxor that deserved to have you taken away for allowing you to peruse such a HORRIBLE choice of cinema. Furthermore, they should be tarred, feathered, arrested AND PROSECUTED TO THE FULLEST EXTENT OF THE LAW!!!!"
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Baba Yaga:
My senior year advanced chemistry teacher was a 300 pound bbw just out of college. I had a fun year in her class that's for sure.
One time she and I were going over an assignment together and she literally sat on top of the desk with her feet on the chair. I came within inches of saying "you think the desk can handle your big butt?" but caught myself.
After I graduated we'd send handwritten letters back and forth for a while and I wanted to ask her out, but didnt because I didnt have my narcissistic ego yet. Sometimes I wonder where shes at now and if shes still fat or not.
John Smith:
How old were you when you were at your senior year?
Baba Yaga:
17
Hence why I waited till AFTER I graduated to contemplate making a move.
John Smith:
That is still a case of turpitude and moral defilement against a minor. She groomed you. I am very well familiar with teachers and female school staff members who seduces or entices their students, trust me: I'm black... it happened to a lot of us.
I will be not surprized if ever she goes even further toward her next prey...
What in the name of autism is this? She didnt groom anything as I said I *DIDNT* do anything with her. I wanted to make a tongue in cheek comment one time but didnt actually say it. We kept in contact through handwritten letters which werent inappropriate at all. I said I had a fun year because she was great to look at, not because we actually did anything. How is that grooming?
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