TCC:
I think the figurative language is great in this piece, aside from the too vivid ice spider part. I love all the references to the clear inspiration.
I am sure the magic stuff really comes to light in the rest, but I am left wondering about it. Are they communicating with gohsts, or legit witches? The crumbs were getting laid for sure.
I was a bit unconvinced on how they could be so large and yet also not that measurably large in their clothing sizes and weight. But I might have been imposing my own imagery onto the characters. Fat brain level 1000 sometimes.
Thanks for the free sample for the spooky time and organizing everything.
I’m really glad you liked it! And I hope you read the rest. I don’t give away the complete mystery completely but I hope I leave enough clues to follow that it comes together.
Just to wax poetic, this started out as a spooky Halloween kinky story last fall, so what you read is basically that. There might have been one more morning after chapter. But I liked the characters so I took it in a different direction. I think it really starts getting good with the next chapter.
I appreciate the feedback on their sizes. They’re definitely not meant to be very overweight (at least in the early chapters), but they’re big for them. Claire might feel bigger (or want to feel bigger) than she actually is. But I’ll look at that if it’s confusing. Thank you for the note on the spider, too. That’s a little on the nose, I agree.
And thanks for liking story club! I think it’s fun. Tell your friends! We need a November story too