Tentacles:
I find this idea strangely fascinating not sure why. Dunno how much storytelling potential or not there is.
Munchies:
I absolutely hate it because of how it plays into a lot of sexism and power imbalances in every single story I've read with that concept. Adding to it, there are some cultures irl with similar ideas and they do not treat their women very well. This includes cultures with thin women and fat men as well as fat women and thin men.
Letters And Numbers:
I think those would be the traps to avoid if someone was going to write a story like that, for sure.
Birds could be an interesting species to model off of, but once you start giving an animal consciousness and free will and all of that, you start running into power imbalances.
Munchies:
I am a firm believer in that you can make a good story out of anything. I think that there is a way to explore a world that has strict body expectations enmeshed with gender roles in a way that isn't supportive of such sexism.
However, I have never seen such a story like that - especially not in kink space. I've been reading feedist erotica for about a decade now - maybe more. These sorts of stories tend to be the most sexist of them all.
Imo, the only way to pull that off is to make a story about rejecting societal norms. But even that would need to be handled with great care because it runs the risk of being fatphobic or thin-shaming.
Writing is hard! Good sci-fi especially. I’m no good at it, personally. It’s hard! I hope the OP writes something good.
2 years
Tentacles:
I find this idea strangely fascinating not sure why. Dunno how much storytelling potential or not there is.
Munchies:
I absolutely hate it because of how it plays into a lot of sexism and power imbalances in every single story I've read with that concept. Adding to it, there are some cultures irl with similar ideas and they do not treat their women very well. This includes cultures with thin women and fat men as well as fat women and thin men.
I think those would be the traps to avoid if someone was going to write a story like that, for sure.
Birds could be an interesting species to model off of, but once you start giving an animal consciousness and free will and all of that, you start running into power imbalances.
2 years
TubSlug:I'm going on a road trip to Yosemite and Yellowstone this summer. Does anyone have any advice for what to see with a car and without too much hiking?
Thanks
Haven’t been to Yosemite, but Yellowstone is very casual walk friendly. There’s real hiking, too, but the big attractions like Old Faithful are very accessible. It’s one of the most amazing places on earth (I’m sure Yosemite is too)! Hope you have a great time.
2 years
Stevita:I'll totally volunteer "Saturday" for next month or the months to come, tear me apart
You’re on deck! Thank you!
2 years
J8o8h8n:
How do you stay motivated to gain when you start to feel sick/uncomfortable from stuffing yourself daily? I'm at what's supposed to be day 4 of my 30 day stuffing/gaining challenge and, since I woke up this morning, I haven't really wanted to eat much and I feel an almost hungry yet full feeling.
You don’t have to do something that doesn’t make you feel good
(I mean besides go to work, do chores, call your grandmother, etc.)
2 years
Apologies for the bump, and this isn't a super important ask, but it is profile related.
Would it be possible to be able to expand the list of people who are following you, and maybe be able to see names without a mouseover (which doesn't work at all on mobile)?
It's not super important, it would just be interesting to browse the list sometimes.
2 years
Letters And Numbers:
Thanks everyone for the honest feedback, on the story and on the format of a monthly story club/book club. Trying something new!
Munchies:
I think there should be better guidelines. Positive feedback only tends to backfire. I'm not saying people should be cruel or malicious. But I've seen time and time again where positive feedback only leads to people policing other's criticism in ways that prevent growth.
I also think there should be clearly guidelines on what stories should be reviewed. And I'm not just talking about "Feederism 101".
For example, I have a story on here about a dominant feedee queen with a harem of beautiful men. As proud as I am with that story, I know it will not appeal to certain audiences.
If you do decide to include darker, edgier, or more graphic stories, you need to make certain to post content warnings.
All great suggestions! Keeping it positive and constructive will always be my goal, and I hope that by doing it that way more people will feel comfortable to volunteer to have their stories read “out loud”. But all opinions are welcome, and suggestions for future stories are definitely welcome!
2 years
Thanks everyone for the honest feedback, on the story and on the format of a monthly story club/book club. Trying something new!
2 years
Passing For Vanilla:
I thought the graphic sexual descriptions were really clear and I understood exactly what was happening. The moment was captured really well.
This is a really great comment. Action scenes, whether it’s sex, or a car chase, or a baseball game, can be really difficult to write, and one of the hardest things to do is follow the action and make sure the reader knows where moving objects are in relation to each other. It’s easy to have it be a jumbled mess. This story does that well, but it’s a good check on any action scene. Just stop at a random point and “who’s sticking what where and why?”. Or something like that.
2 years
Munchies:
I will admit that I couldn't read it. This is a dense text block, and my eyes kept sliding off the page.
When you make a story, don't be afraid to use space. It allows your eyes to rest and better process whatever you see.
A general rule of thumb is to separate paragraphs with a line of space - much as I do in my response. The same thing goes with dialog. When another character starts talking - or the dialog ends - create a new line of space.
If a chapter has multiple scenes, I like to separate the scenes with a line break or multiple lines of space.
I think that’s great advice, especially for online writing where you can’t indent paragraphs. I do it myself.
It’s a cool story, though, that I think really captures the feel of a woman who gains confidence and becomes empowered by being fed by her partner. There’s some nice back and forth power dynamic, but it swings back to the protagonist at the end. I liked seeing a POC protagonist in a WG story also.
I definitely wouldn’t be afraid to go back in and add some spaces between paragraphs or give it a once over for word choice, but nice story!
2 years
