I'm looking for a story that used to be very popular and quite revered some years ago on this site; alas, I can't find it anywhere on here now. The story's name is 'To be Filled'. It's essentially about a very large woman who falls for a devilish feeder on a chance meeting, who then coaxes her into moving in with him and eventually signing over control of her life to be made immobile and beyond.
I recall it being around 7 or 8 chapters long I think, most of which detail the intense conflict between the feedees wild sexual arousal, and frightened, rational senses, as the feeder manipulates her into becoming his pet to fatten to no end. I believe the story used to be on the Dimensions Magazine website too, however I can't find it there either now.
If anyone has any information on who the original author was or where I might be able to find it now (maybe some generous user has saved a copy of it) I would be extremely grateful for you to share. Cheers.
3 years
Hello everyone, I've just posted my first story in quite a while. It's called Caitlin's Demise, 4 chapters long and is completed. Would be great if I could have some feedback and hear people's comments on what they liked. Cheers.
3 years
simondrake35:
I wrote my first story in years (title above) and would love some feedback if anyone's interested in viewing it on my profile. Cheers.
Aquarius64:
I have tried to read 6 steps to heaven, but found it a difficult read.
1: There are no paragraphs throughout. You need to break each chapter down into smaller sections.
2: If you are going to include speech in your story, you need to learn how to punctuate it properly and not stick / marks in all over the place.
3: Your spelling is good
4: The plot of your story is good, you just need to make some changes to make it better.
You wanted feedback. My aim is to give a practical criticism so that you may improve in the future.
Many thanks for that Aquarius!
1. Apologies, I uploaded it quickly and didn't think. I will go back and edit it to resolve this.
2. The / were for thoughts, not speech. I thought this was clear with me using ' for the female's speech and " for the male's speech.
3. Appreciate that, I double checked it to make sure it was as legible as possible in that sense.
4. Cheers, I'm glad you liked it overall. Looking to be more active and write more in the near future. Your feedback is of much help.
4 years
My last story got 13k views so hope this is up to standard.
4 years
I wrote my first story in years (title above) and would love some feedback if anyone's interested in viewing it on my profile. Cheers.
4 years
